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With him, I pull out
of clouded realities;

Now I can go home--

If only I knew the way
to forgotten memories.
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My first attempt at a "Tanka", submitted to the lovely *Writers-Workshop
Check out their journal for unlimited brain tingles.
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"If only I knew the way
to forgotten memories."

I love this line.

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Unrepentant twist the words
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thank you :smooch:

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Brain tingles ftw :bucktooth:
thank you for saying so :hug:

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Brain tingles ftw :bucktooth:
I really liked it but I feel that the last two lines evoked a lot more than the rest of the poem.

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Four out of five emoticons recommend you read Gibah's work.
yes i have to say i agree, although i can't say it was an accident. Actually now that you got me thinking about it, I think I'd like to emphasize the "split" between to ideas even more radically so that you have two totally different moods in one lil poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts! :)

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Brain tingles ftw :bucktooth:
Was my pleasure :D

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Four out of five emoticons recommend you read Gibah's work.
The last two lines are simply Wonderful :heart: I think I'll wrote them on my "Sentences Book" (I write there that sentences that I love!)
Anywa, it's really a nice work, and fits the workshop; you expressed really a lot of things with those few words...

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